I am so excited i got my new pup. Its so soft and cute, i love it so much! i wish i could sleep with em' tonight but George said ill kill em' if i do. Hopefully i can sleep next to em' every night when it gets older. I want to pet em' everyday, all day.
George said we can go and live in our new house in a month! i am so excited, i cant wait to have all of em' rabbits so i can pet them whenever i want to. I will be so happy! Candy's also gonna live with us because he is getting old. But i cant wait, we're gonna live of the fatta the lan', it's a dream come true!
This afternoon was bad though. Curley came in and started yelling at me, i did not do anything!
He walked to me screaming, then cornered me against the wall. I begged him to stop he punched me in the face so many times. I yelled at George to help me but he just stood there like nothing was going on. Then finally George told me to fight back. Blood was coming from my face, my heart was beating faster. Curley trough a punch, i caught it and held on, he screamed so i held on tighter. I finally let go. After i thought George was going to be mad at me for alla this but he was not, even know we almost lost our jobs.
Sincerely,
Lennie
1). One suggestion is to capitalize all of the i's.
ReplyDelete2). Another improvement that you can make is that third paragraph. Put it all together into one and not two, I think that you just messed up?
3). I love the story, it sounds exactly like something that Lenny would say. It's also so perfect for how he acts in this book, and it's something that Lenny would write (not sure if he can write?)